lack of the followings:- Establishing shot of him finishing the game and he has a date to meet but he is hungry- No food at home but he is fighting against time to fulfill his hunger- What is the resolution/climax at the end?Theres's lack of conflicts/drama in your storyPlease RE-DO !!!!
I see your point, Zach. I will re-do and post again as soon as possible, thank you.
lack of the followings:
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- No food at home but he is fighting against time to fulfill his hunger
- What is the resolution/climax at the end?
Theres's lack of conflicts/drama in your story
Please RE-DO !!!!
I see your point, Zach. I will re-do and post again as soon as possible, thank you.
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